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Paper 2 Part B;學校雜誌、青年網站 · 約 400 字

Article / Blog

Audience: 同學或公眾,非老師. 吸引閱讀 + 資訊/說服

結構

  1. 1

    Title

    具體、可帶問句或對比。避免 My Article on Pollution。

  2. 2

    Hook

    場景、數據或反常識一句。立刻告訴讀者這篇關他事。

  3. 3

    Body

    兩至三個小標題亦可。例子要可見(地鐵、校巴、手機螢幕),勿空喊 should。

  4. 4

    Ending

    call to action 或回扣開頭場景。

句式

  • Picture this: …
  • What nobody tells S.4 students is that…
  • The fix is smaller than it sounds: …
  • Next time you…, try … instead.

範文(教師向:接近考場篇幅)

Put the phone in another room — a small experiment

The night before a chemistry test, my phone sat on the desk “just in case”. By midnight I knew the names of three stray cats in Sham Shui Po and nothing about electrolysis. The cats were charming. The paper the next morning was not. I tried a dull trick for one week: the phone charged in the kitchen, not beside the bed. The first two nights felt rude, as if I had snubbed a friend who kept buzzing. I stood in the doorway twice and went back to the notes. Then the evenings grew longer. I finished a chapter. I slept before one. On Friday I still checked the news — after the bag was packed. This is not a sermon against the internet. Maps, group chats about homework and a parent’s call at 11 p.m. are why the device exists. It is a reminder that attention leaks in millilitres. Notifications are designed by people whose bonus depends on you opening one more clip. If the device is in another room, you have to stand up to leak. Most of the time, you will not bother — and that is the whole point. Schools like to print posters about “digital wellness”. A poster cannot outwait an app. A kitchen socket can. Try it before the next exam week, not as a personality change, just as a piece of furniture. The cats will still be there in the morning. Electrolysis, unfortunately, will also still be there — but you may remember it.

Checklist

  • 有標題
  • 開頭不抄題
  • 有具體場景
  • 結尾有回扣或行動

失分點

  • 標題像功課名稱
  • 全文 You should 說教
  • 沒有具體香港場景
  • 三段結構與議論文一模一樣卻自稱 blog

老師改卷時在比的三段

約 Level 3–4 段(老師會覺得『有寫但空』)

Pollution is a very serious problem in Hong Kong. We should raise awareness and everyone must work together to protect the environment. If we don’t, the future will be bad.

約 Level 5 段(老師會給發展分)

After six, many S.6 students revise in 24-hour fast-food shops and buy a drink they do not want so they will not be asked to leave. A staffed classroom until 10:30 would cost the school a duty teacher, not a new building. That is a narrower, more honest request than ‘raise awareness’.

約 Level 5**–6 段(老師覺得『這人見過世界』)

The Housing letter called the wet market ‘under-utilised’. Mrs Lam’s stall is empty on Tuesdays, yes; it is also the only place on the estate where a family can take three pieces of fish and pay on Friday. A supermarket can mop the floor. It cannot keep that kind of credit. When we applaud an ‘upgrade’, we should say who loses the unofficial overdraft.

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