Writing

Paper 2 Part B 常見 · 約 400 字

Argumentative / Discussion

Audience: 一般讀者/評卷員. 清晰立場 + 有理據展開;可含短暫讓步

結構

  1. 1

    Introduction

    一句背景 recast 題目 → 定義關鍵詞 → 明確 thesis(I argue that…)。勿抄題。

  2. 2

    Body 1–2

    Topic sentence → 具體例子(香港政策/校園/數據級事實)→ 解釋點題 → mini-link 回 thesis。

  3. 3

    Counter + rebuttal

    Critics may argue… However… 讓一步再收回,顯示平衡而非騎牆。

  4. 4

    Conclusion

    重申立場(換詞)→ 前瞻一句。不要加新論點。

句式

  • It is often claimed that…, yet this view overlooks…
  • A more convincing explanation is that…
  • This is not to deny X; rather, X is outweighed by…
  • If schools continue to…, students will likely…

範文(教師向:接近考場篇幅)

Should secondary schools start later in the morning?

Hong Kong teenagers are among the most sleep-deprived in the region, yet most schools still ring the first bell before eight. A later start would not spoil discipline; it would align the timetable with adolescent biology and make the first lesson worth teaching. Sleep researchers have shown that teenagers’ body clocks shift later in adolescence. Asking a sixteen-year-old in Tuen Mun, who has already spent fifty minutes on a bus, to analyse a poem at 7:40 a.m. is asking the brain to sprint before it has woken. Schools that delayed the first lesson by even thirty minutes reported fewer late arrivals and more students able to answer a question in the first period, not chaos in the corridors. Alertness is not a moral quality. It is a condition. Critics worry that after-school activities, tutorial slots and parents’ office hours would be squeezed. The calendar can move as a whole. Clubs can begin and end half an hour later; families who rely on older siblings for pickup can be given a term’s notice. A few sports teams that book public venues at fixed times would need to renegotiate. That is administration. It is not an argument for keeping a timetable that fights the body. There is a cheaper objection: “students will just sleep later and stay online until three.” Some will. Policy should not be designed only for the most self-controlled, but neither should it be abandoned because a minority will waste the gift. A later bell plus a clear homework cutoff — no new assignments after 8 p.m. — is more honest than a 7:35 start and a lecture on grit. Starting later is not a luxury imported from wealthy districts. It is a timetable that treats sleep as part of education, not as an obstacle to it. If we can adjust exam dates for typhoons, we can adjust a bell for biology.

Checklist

  • 第一段有明確立場
  • 每段有具體例子
  • 有反方並反駁
  • 連結詞自然而非堆砌 Firstly Secondly Thirdly

失分點

  • 每段只有口號沒有例子
  • 兩面各寫一半卻沒有立場
  • 突然用 you 教訓讀者
  • 結尾引入全新論點

老師改卷時在比的三段

約 Level 3–4 段(老師會覺得『有寫但空』)

Pollution is a very serious problem in Hong Kong. We should raise awareness and everyone must work together to protect the environment. If we don’t, the future will be bad.

約 Level 5 段(老師會給發展分)

After six, many S.6 students revise in 24-hour fast-food shops and buy a drink they do not want so they will not be asked to leave. A staffed classroom until 10:30 would cost the school a duty teacher, not a new building. That is a narrower, more honest request than ‘raise awareness’.

約 Level 5**–6 段(老師覺得『這人見過世界』)

The Housing letter called the wet market ‘under-utilised’. Mrs Lam’s stall is empty on Tuesdays, yes; it is also the only place on the estate where a family can take three pieces of fish and pay on Friday. A supermarket can mop the floor. It cannot keep that kind of credit. When we applaud an ‘upgrade’, we should say who loses the unofficial overdraft.

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